I Named Him Thor by Alex Cooper - Short - A lone soldier in a field. 12 pages - pdf, format

Okay Ape, you asked me to write you a review of your script so here it is.

In one word, good. Seeming how this is your first debut script as a solo-writer, I think you should be very proud of the kind of strange, tripped-out bizareness that you have created in this script. Obviously, there are a couple of problems with the story and there are quite a few formatting errors, but most are easily forgiveable.

As I was saying, the strangeness of this script is what made it such an enjoyable reading experience for me personally, weird war movies like Apocalypse Now or Full Metal Jacket are my kinda movies and, while I don't think we should be entering this script quite in that catagory, I still enjoyed it on kind of the same level.

The ambiguity of the final scene added to my enjoyment of the script. Whether or not Choy actually exists is something only you know and I'm quite happy not knowing for the time being. Overall, a very good first effort, possibly as strong an effort as could be made for a first-timer. I wish I had liked my first script as much as I liked this one. Just one word of advice: ADD MORE TO THE SUMMARY!!!

All right, I hope we got some outsiders reading this one and posting up some fantastic comments in the near future. Happy reading guys!

Cheers, Chism.

I thought this was an interesting little story. It explores the mind and how it copes with loneliness and boredom. At least that is my interpretation.

My suggestion to you is to be sure to proofread. Often times you used "your" where "you're" should be. The other thing is if Franco truely was a Marine don't use "army uniform" in the description. The generic "military uniform" might be a better choice.

Further down the road I bet you could expand on this and make it a feature. Keep up the good work.