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My Boss's Son by Jonathan Morales - Short - Carlos is a drug dealer, who deals to young high school kids. The local department is on to him and they want to take him down. Manny, 23 must decide to help out a life long friend or incriminat him, using his boss's son. 15 pages - doc, format
You had lots of grammar errors in this. And plenty of spelling ones too.
The format was not great either... a few things: CAPITALIZE your names Use things like CUT TO: .... don't just say Int. A house Capitalize your loglines
But as for the story....I liked it. It was nice and short. I still think it needs some work but you got something here. Oh, and the last scene, the flashback scene, IN MY OPINION should be a little longer.
Ever thought of what it would be like to student-direct a show? What if you had the worst teacher ever? What if your friends wouldn't take it seriously? This is just some of the frustration and unfortunate yet hilarious comedy that Mark Hockley experiences in my show: PRODUCTION
I agree, there are formatting errors. But as a quick side note, CUT TO: and other cutting transitions are usually best left out. So in order to make your scene headers stand out, capitalize them. Same with your transitions that you do use. And same goes for characters' names in dialogue headings. All this usually helps the reading flow better. Sorry I couldn't add more, I'm in a pinch.
Beginnings - It's high school all over again. Seriously. (now fixed and cleaned!)
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