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Don
Posted: September 25th, 2006, 8:42pm
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Goose by Robert Spence - Short, Comedy - Tom, a Napoleon Dynamite fan's life is made hell in two pages. 2 pages - pdf, format
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Shelton
Posted: September 25th, 2006, 8:57pm
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Alright, what am I missing here? I mean, besides everything. This made no sense to me at all.
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bert
Posted: September 25th, 2006, 8:57pm
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So is this a giant goose, or is Tom a very, very small midget? You can't just defy the laws of physics without giving any indication as to how such a thing might actually be filmed. Back to the drawing board, I'm afraid.
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michel
Posted: September 26th, 2006, 3:14am
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Is it a dream? Is it surrealistic? Are you Luis Bunuel or Jean Cocteau fan? Are you stoned? As Mike and Bert I didn't get it. Sorry Michel
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chism
Posted: September 26th, 2006, 7:49am
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Confused? I thought this script was really straight-forward. You start off with an interesting character, one you could build upon, layering him with pathology regarding Napoleon Dynamite and how pathetic he really is and all that jazz. He's a nerd, nerds are in right now. But of course it's all thrown away when he falls out the back of the bus and is eaten by a goose. The script seems to say, anybody out there forget who you are, forget about your hopes and your dreams because, in the end, we're all going to be eaten by geese. I hated this script. No offense, but I truly hated it. Cheers, Chism.
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rpedro
Posted: September 26th, 2006, 8:12am
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It's just a little a copycat of napoleon dynamite in my opinion.. and didn't get the part with the goose..
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Vaughn
Posted: September 26th, 2006, 8:16am
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It's like he got to the end and had no idea where to go or how to finish it so just threw in some pointless nonsense. Incredibly lazy.
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Shelton
Posted: September 26th, 2006, 3:01pm
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It's like he got to the end and had no idea where to go or how to finish it so just threw in some pointless nonsense. Incredibly lazy.
If it were me, I would have had him fall off the back of the bus, catching his foot on a rope or something, thus allowing him to be dragged along the road like that poor action figure at the beginning of ND.
My two cents.
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dogglebe
Posted: September 27th, 2006, 11:38am
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I got the distinct impression that this script was uploaded the moment the first draft was cranked out. There's no focus or story/character developement to it. Just a couple of images. Phil
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Bojangles
Posted: September 27th, 2006, 11:52pm
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I'm new to the site, but not new to the art of screenwriting. Sorry, this had a lot of errors. For once, I'd like to see someone not use an actual song in the script itself. It isn't a huge deal, but I suggest just writing what genre the music is. What is up with your ending? There isn't one, really. The emergency doors open, he falls back, gets eaten by a goose. I don't think you really were thinking about quality, you were thinking more along the lines of posting a script. Take your time. There isn't a deadline for your script.
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RobertSpence
Posted: September 28th, 2006, 1:18pm
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this wasn't ment to make sense, it was ment to b funny.
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dogglebe
Posted: September 28th, 2006, 1:25pm
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Well, atleast you accomplished it not making sense... Comedy is probably the hardest genre to write. Aside from the fact that you actually have to make people laugh with your writing, you still have to have a story that holds your jokes together. You had a couple of vague scenes that had your main character in it, and an ending that jusy made people shake their heads. Phil
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RobertSpence
Posted: September 28th, 2006, 2:08pm
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lmao, have u never just sat down and wrote a lot of crap? this is not ment to be serious, or have a story to it. That is the whole point.
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dogglebe
Posted: September 28th, 2006, 2:36pm
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I've written crap before. I just don't post it. If you plan on posting more work (serious work) in the future, you'll have trouble getting it read, because of this. Phil
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Bojangles
Posted: September 28th, 2006, 5:12pm
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I'm with Dogglebe on this completely.
If this was meant to be crap, then why would you post such a thing? Just my two cents, as some people here call it.
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