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Posted: October 21st, 2006, 8:34am Report to Moderator
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Pepi and Kitty Do A Horror Adventure by A Member who has had every single posted deleted - Short, cr** - no summary 15 pages     A October '06 One Week Challenge entry - doc, format


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This one had me laughing. Kind of reminded me of Mr. Bean. Yes, I can see the horror here. LOL Cute!

Cute characters, with mention of a few members.  

Formatting... well, you know.


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Despite all the red flags, I read this script first and all I have to say is 'wtf?'

Amusing little tale, especially once I realized that each segment was a little different and not the exact same thing.  While I have my suspicions who wrote this, I wondere how much truth is there in who Pepi is.


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I kinda liked this one too. And I completely get where CindyLKeller is coming from with the Mr. Bean thing. A good script, not one of the best milk/horrors going around at the moment, but certainly a good read.


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I really liked the vast majority of this story -- asides in the descriptive passages are fine for something like this -- and formatting is never less of a non-issue.  

But while I am a patient man --  by the third time -- I was ready for this script to be over.  Any jokes from the third iteration could have very easily been incorporated into the first two parts.

I know who this is --  I can smell them all over this script -- like the smell of an old kity litter box.


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Um, I don't get it.  Good attempt, and I suggest the writer keep continuing (you just get better with practice!)  But go for a little less cutting and pasting, and tighten it up the descriptions a bit more...


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As been said already, cute. It made me laugh because it reminded me of those weird games that are out for the Sony PSP like a game that I've got... but can't remember the name right now. It's full of colour with weird, sometimes or most times, cute little characters whose dialogue is just strange like "Wow, this is fun!". There's even a lot of repeated lines in those games.

Even though this one was cute and all, it's not something that I really enjoyed. I don't have a clue about the ending and end line. To be honest, I don't have a clue about the entire thing... And I'm not even gonna try and say anything about the formatting... who wrote this?

EDIT: Now that I know this is a script from a d**m leech, I'll go ahead and say that I wrote, quite, a nice review of the script because I felt sorry for it. I thought it was written by someone with a 7 year olds mind or, indeed, a 7 year old child with a chunk of brain missing. This script should never have been allowed to come on...

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Leech monkey with half a brain...
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Ok. Sorry to whoever wrote this script but this is without doubt the worst i have ever read in my life. I mean firstly look at the formatting, it is absolutely atrocious. You haven't even went over it to check for spelling errors. Also, it is like an eight year old has sat down, and started talking about his faveourite animals, "his kitty", or should i say "Pepi kitty" and a silly penguin.

The copy and pasting was abysmal. It's like complete repetition with little changes made. How long did it take you to finish this?

If every one of your posts have been deleted, then this speaks for itself...

I just don't even think the plot is worth comtemplating. It is about someone called Pepi, who has a cat, who walks past girls and smiles at the camera as if on a comedy TV sitcom. And there's a little penguin there as a catalyst for trying to make the story scary. The jokes aren't even funny. It is just a simple script.

                                                    If this was a good effort, then i am sincerely sorry for my comment but it does not look like you have bothered at all. That picture just makes things worse towards the bottom of the script. If you are serious about screenwriting, then be serious..
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PS, You couldn't even be bothered to do a brief summary of what your story is about. This just goes to show the lack of effort that was incorperated.
                                                                


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Lol so someone has made up a fictional character, and a script to go with it?


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I'm confused. I remember Pepi posting some comical but insulting reviews of scripts on the site. Are you saying he was a sockpuppet?
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I was under the assumption that he was just a troll who posted his silly nonsense remarks here.  I never thought I'd see a script from him.


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I guess I haven't been around long enough to fully grasp the concept of Pepi.
I can only hope that any remotely positive reviews came from people who are in on the joke.

That was funny though in a worst screenplay ever way.  Reminds me of internet phenomenon 'Ill Mitch.'


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After reading this script, and the discussions on both this thread as well as the OWE thread, I'll chip in a piece of detective work here. If, for the sake of argument, Pepi is a sock puppet, and the person who runs him also wrote this script, then they are rather inconsistent and not much of a writer. I thought the script was funny. Sure, a bit over the top, but funny.

But Pepi never had a "kitty." That was one thing I always noticed about his posts about the cat is that he always spelled it "kity." Also, the use of language in the script is far more understandable than his posts were as well.

Finally, from a logical standpoint, if Pepi is a sockpuppet, why proclaim it from a script? And if Pepi is actually someone who just doesn't know enough English to come off making sense, then all we've done is scare off another one by our rather shameful attitudes.

Sure, every post of his caused some kind of fuss and controversy. Kind of wild, if you think about it. I was downright shocked to see where some of those threads went after he said something (before the overblown thing got whittled out). His opinions and commentary were amusing, to say the least, but there was always a shred of worth to what he tried to say.

Well, I guess he made an impact, since he's got his own script that, just based on my Holmesian deduction, was probably not written by either the guy (if he's real) or his puppetteer (if he's not).

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Quoted from George Willson
Sure, every post of his (Pepi’s) caused some kind of fuss and controversy. Kind of wild, if you think about it. I was downright shocked to see where some of those threads went after he said something (before the overblown thing got whittled out). His opinions and commentary were amusing, to say the least, but there was always a shred of worth to what he tried to say.


We got two totally different impressions of Pepi. I understood his posts plainly. I thought he was rather direct with his thoughts. His description of using someone’s script for kitty litter was plain enough for me to understand what he was all about. He was a troll.

I didn’t see any worth in his posts whatsoever. It seems to me that he blatantly ran down the script of someone the mods didn’t care for so they allowed him to get away with it and looked for value in his posts to justify it. That’s just my opinion and I’m reasonably certain it’s accurate.

Either way, this script is cr**, just like it says next to the genre.



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