Jolly Popped by Abigail Porterfield - Short, Sci Fi  - Travellers search for their loog lost galaxy. A fatal coordinate leads them in the out door and face to face with a hungry clan of microwave pop corn feeders. - pdf, format

This one was odd, but I liked it. It was so ridiculous I couldn't help but chuckle at it. The names I thought were funny, you had everything but a Colonel Corn. So yeah, not bad for what it was. Kinda reminded me of Willy Wonka for some reason.

It was cute. Quite tounge in cheek - with a bit of drool.

For some reason it really reminded me of a commercial - or it would be clever as a series of commericals (without the sex jokes of course).  

But I have to reprove you for writing a comedy when this was supposed to be a sci-fi challenge.  

Otherwise, I got a couple of chuckles and groans out of it - so thanks.

It was verynice reading. I think the writer potential here showed that he has lot of chance to write comedy for real, good one's!

Phil didn't specify that it should be a serious Sci-fi.

Sci-fi with pop-corn won't be a serious combination!

great job

Okay.

So I really enjoyed the visual of spaceships like kernels shooting microwave beams in order to "pop" the other spaceships. I really thought that was clever and funny.  I also liked their method of killing, for basically the same reason.  

I wasn't really pleased with the rest however.  I mean, it was funny how it sort of mocked certain sci-fi cliches, but even in a movie meant for mocking, you have to have a real ending and the script needs to more sense.

-Tyler

This was a clever read. Essentially a very simplistic sci-fi. Another intergalactic battle scene yet spiced up nicely by the clever use of popcorn themes, especially naming the ship Orville One. The dialogue and descriptions were solid for the most part. There were even a few dirty bits thrown in there, although you didn't take it over-the-top.

All in all, a pretty well-rounded sci-fi script, which integrated the popcorn theme well. Good job. I've got a guess who you might be.

This one ended abruptly and I'd like to see what happens next. The dialogue was also very silly and I enjoyed it, along with the "I visited the Milky Way and All I got was this stupid tee-shirt" tee-shirt, that gave me a chuckle. This one was well written, but the ending didn't do. I'd like to see what happens next.

Sean

It nailed the theme and genre quite well. There’s a lot of creativity in this alternate universe that the author created, and in which pop corn plays a relevant role. Some funny bits here and there as well (specially the dirty ones, haha!).

But it feels that the author focused more on the frame of this picture than the picture itself, there’s not much story going on within this popcorn universe. Events occur fast and in an arbitrary way; feels like a collection of typical sci-fi scenarios with the pop corn element thrown in for comedic effect.

Nevertheless, it satisfies the requirements of a very challenging exercise, so it’s quite a good effort.

Sci-fi: check. Popcorn: check. This one was pretty good. It's ultra speed pace made this script an easy read. I wasn't certain I liked the ending much.  A little abrupt for my liking and I'd like to see what happens next.

Overall, good. Enjoyable read.

No, no, no, no, no. no, no, no, no - who wrote this one? Ahhhh!!!

I wasn't impressed with this one at all, sorry.

One thing, your formatting as pretty good but the story was, like, not very satisfying. The ending kind of tailed off into space and left me wondering what the Hell I just read. In fact, I felt cheated.

There were some amusing dialogue in this, the "fill her with my seeds" thing was laughable, as was "that'll make her pop up nice and fresh" - very funny...

You got some funny dialogue in this piece but the story didn't do anything for me..

You managed to achieve the requirements of the OWC thing with the Popcorn/Sci Fi thing just about..

Not a bad effort, just didn't do anything for me..

Maybe if you had a better ending it might improve this? Just a thought...

Well done anyways,,

I liked this one.

I thought it was quite clever.  And I really enjoyed how you used different words throughout the script that were corn related.  Everything from the character names, to the yellow silk robe and some of the dirtyier words too.  

You had a lot of sci-fi, and a lot of popcorn, and you have lots of action scenes.  Actually the whole script read as one long action sequence.

I did like this one so good job.

Pia  

I really enjoyed this one. It was so funny that I actually almost choked on my soda, twice!

This was pretty good.  Nice writing and some clever usages of the popcorn/sci-fi themes.  It could have been more though i.e. a little more substance could of been added.  Reading through it was just kind of going from one page to another and the story just wasn't strong enough.

But it was entertaining and had me chuckling at a few parts.  Good job!

I want to thank everyone who took the time to read my OWE. This one was a thinker. Anyway, I look forward to the next exercise... and I only hope it doesn't come three months down the road.

Spencer