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Posted: March 17th, 2008, 4:55pm Report to Moderator
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Sidlet the Shitlet by Spencer McDonald - Short, Action - Wasted life.  Wasted people.  5 pages - pdf, format


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Posted: March 17th, 2008, 5:27pm Report to Moderator
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Hey Spencer,

Was this an MP script?  

It wasn't quiet what I expected from the log line and I found the whole thing rather disturbing.  But on the other hand I think you did a great job with this. You have really blossomed into quite a screenwriter.

The only thing I would suggest is that you strengthen the connection that it's his Mom the first time you see her.  It is obvious that it's his Mom on paper but I don't think it will be on the screen.

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I thought that was pretty cool. My only problem was Janice's line about peeing herself, but that's obviously very minor. This story is very disturbing, but it could happen. That's why it's so disturbing to th reader. Good job!
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