Hero-Man by Duncan Kellett (angelus77) - Comedy - A nerdy scientist drinks his own "super serum" and transforms into Hero-Man, the world's greatest superhero!  This hilarious script is a spoof of the genre and won the Grand Prize at the Emerald City Comic Con, Creative Writing Category.   124 pages - pdf, format

I started reading this, and certainly am enjoying the read.
It will be a few more days before I leave comments... have to work.

Cindy

Oh Duncan,

Sorry it has taken me so long to get back here and let you know what I thought of your script...


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I thought it was fantastic.
I liked your characters, the story, and above all the comedy.
I laughed out loud a lot so I don't have a lot to say about it.

I don't have anything really negative to say, but I do have a suggestion for one part of the script that bothered me.

This script is so funny, but the part about subject #3's bare butt I thought was foul, and didn't fit the tone of the rest of the script.

I think I would change that, put him into some funny looking underdrawers. Maybe have him in a pair of pink girlie panties... red long johns... something funny ???

Anyway, I can see this script making it, and making a lot of money. I would go see it

I'll be reading the script again, too. I enjoyed it that much.

Thanks for the funny read.
Sorry if I wasn't any help, but I don't think you need much with this one.
Cindy