the man and the spirit do gay people go to heaven? by jose (tono) paniagua - Drama - A man become friend to the spirit of a dead man from another planet and want to find out what happens after dead - doc, format

Okay well if no one is going to say it, I will. You have written lots of pages here, so well done on getting your story down. The format is not so good. I read the title of the script last, as it was on the last page...

The first two lines are "Richard went to the hospital. The emergency room was crowded." Umm, what?

PLEASE read a few scripts on this site to see how formatting is done. And how correct grammar is written. And correct spelling.

And FFS please fix up the title of the damn thing using capitals!!!

Good luck.

I agree with the previous post. NOBODY is even going to even bother reading this script. There isn't even a hint of formatting going on here. Scene action is written in the prsent tense. You have no slug lines for master INT. or EXT. shots etc.

Anyone can write a terrible screenplay. Some can write a good screenplay. Very few can write a great screenplay.

Nobody can make you a great writer. But at least do yourself a favour and learn the correct way to format a screenplay and proper grammar.

Quoted from badbaz I agree with the previous post. NOBODY is even going to even bother reading this script. There isn't even a hint of formatting going on here. Scene action is written in the prsent tense. You have no slug lines for master INT. or EXT. shots etc. Anyone can write a terrible screenplay. Some can write a good screenplay. Very few can write a great screenplay. Nobody can make you a great writer. But at least do yourself a favour and learn the correct way to format a screenplay and proper grammar.

Sorry, I'm a newbie, when you said "Scene action is written in the present tense", you meant that he should have written it that way or you were appointing one of his mistakes ? If it is the last option, which should be the verbal tense to use ?

PS: I'm asking this because I'm reading The Changeling's screenplay and I believe it is written in the present tense.

You should write action as if it is unfolding before our eyes as you describe it. Therefore, you use the present tense. So "Richard went to the hospital. The emergency room was crowded" should at the very least be "Richard enters the crowded emergency room."

Formatting is something that is so important to just learn and get right, because once you have it sorted you can move onto WHAT you're writing, not HOW you're laying it out. Prepare yourself for an analogy: you want your writing to be transparent, to be a window into the world you're showing us. Bad formatting is like flecks of dirt on that window - they obscure our view, and divert our attention away from what we're supposed be to be looking at. Writing in the correct tense isn't much of a start, but at LEAST it's a start.

JonnyBoy answered you question FDiogo better than I could have. Just to be clear, I was making a statement that scene action is written in the present tense.

Quoted from badbaz JonnyBoy answered you question FDiogo better than I could have. Just to be clear, I was making a statement that scene action is written in the present tense.

Ok, thanks a lot JohnnyBoy and badbaz.