Real Life Conversations by Jerome Moses - Short, Comedy - Three teachers have a dirty conversation on a playground full of kids. 20 pages - pdf, format

There's a reason real life conversations don't make good film: it's boring.

Yeah I just tried to read this one too. I made it to two pages before I gave up and scrolled down the rest of it. Nothing at all happens, the conversation is boring and annoying and jumping all over the place. I hope this is your first attempt at a script because it is very dull. I can't imagine anyone reading to the end of this let alone wanting to see it on screen.

Read the two comments above and wanted to read further and provide useful comments.
Soooo....
p1  Shes should be she’s in the first dialogue
P2  I’m and artist should be I’m an artist
and about there my vision got a little blurry.

This is not a screenplay. It's two people talking. It might work as a stage play - but even then you'd need some action to break it up, even if it were just Gerald and Howie getting up moving about a bit!

I had no sense of place. Nothing to ground this in "real life" (ironic, considering the title). It does not hold the interest at all, I am afraid.

As a screenplay it just fails completely - ask yourself this: would you sit and watch this?

Oh - and it says "Three Teachers" - but I only counted two!

Best advice I could give is for you to introduce scenes illustrating the conversation, which might not fit what is being said by the characters.

Hmmm

Where do I start.

Your intro is the only action, if any in the whole script; apart form "Howie puts his arms up." and "Sarah Exits"

No introduction of characters
No clue as to where Sarah and the kid comes from.

I read it all. I did want to do it justice but, I am sorry to say...this is not a screenplay, I have to agree with the others on that?

I am not sure where or what you aiming to achieve with this.
Dialogues between two people, when used to this extent, should at least move a story forward.

I think you need to take a fresh look at this and write a story that incorporates the whining and what nots of these two characters and turn into something like a comedy and maybe have this in a teacher party night or something.

I don't really know, but I am sure you can turn this into something a little more interesting, with HEAPS more action.

Good Luck!

Is this really a screenplay? Cuz it'll be extremely boring to watch two talking heads for 20 minutes. You need more, a LOT more action in this piece. Something as little as character expressions (e.g. smiles, shrugs, shot a look) will help. I couldn't finish it after page 4 when all I see is dialogue. I scrolled down to page 20 and it didn't get any better. I am really sorry.