Badass Benedict Bradley by Brad Sutherland (cabbageman9) - Comedy - In the small, ficticious community of Esstown, Oregon, Bradley writes a college essay that opposes the powerful Samaritan Party and calls out for a nationwide revolution. His paper somehow gets published in this party's very newspaper and triggers an over the top response from certain powers-at-be who are living and working behind the scenes. Bradley tries to flee town with the help of his two best friends, a trio of pot dealers, and a mysterious British lawyer, but the local sheriff can't help but get in his way and stir things up in this dark and twisted political satire. 125 pages - pdf, format

You use the word small three times in the first paragraph
'based on true ideas'  nice.  
take out some of the 'we sees'  it doesnt seem to matter much if we looking at the boys from the waiste up or not.  Just say theyre nude, and the director will figure it out.
p6 breaks should be brakes
seems odd to give Ziggy a super if you havent done that for the others.
Jeger is spelled Jager
As entertaining as all the bar talk is it could probably be cut a lot shorter.
Stopped reading around p20, the bar intro kinda dragged, expecially after we had just seen the whole camping bit.  I would consider dropping the camping bit, and just having it as a story they tell in the bar if its necesary for the story.  
I'll get back in later, the writings pretty good, and other than a few typos there weren't any format issues..
I did like the title too, thats what got me reading it, though the logines a little thick.