Alabama Bloodbath by Ben Wasden - Horror, Comedy - Every year on the date of January 22nd, gruesome murders occur in the town of Hellhole, Alabama. It's up to two detectives to find out why. 114 - pdf, format

Thanks for posting this so soon. I hope that a lot of people read it, enjoy it, and comment. I think it came out really funny!

Hi Ben,

Just flicked through the script to begin with. I'm going to give it a read later tonight - a little bit tied up at present. Some advice on a few things I did notice upon first glance was that your action lines are too long. Try and shorten the action to 5 lines at the most. Also, your sluglines should read like this: INT. LOCATION X - DAY so that we can see the time of day. Also avoid camera movements, as the director and DP handle those. I suggest to you that you purchase screenwriting software or even get a free application and then turn it into a PDF, as your 114 pages, put through screenwriting software, properly formated and measured, etc, will dramatically reduce how many pages you've got, by about 20-25.

I'll post again when it's all read.

Thanks.

Thanks for the advice A.S. Kelly, and I hope that you enjoy the script.

Ben