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Don
Posted: December 1st, 2009, 11:00pm Report to Moderator
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Smile Now by Ismael Gonzalez (izzy) - Action/Adventure - A Joker Fan Film: A Joker fan of the Dark Knight gets an unsuspected visit from a sociopath on the verge of snapping. 8 pages - pdf, format


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Posted: December 2nd, 2009, 9:16am Report to Moderator
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WTF? This makes no sense and has so many errors it is ridiculous. I have no idea why you thought it was a good idea to keep changing the colour of your font, it is incredibly annoying.

Sorry but this doesn't work on any level.
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I have to agree with Trojan.

What is with your logline? "A Joker fan of the Dark Knight..." - Huh? Is he a fan of the joker or The Dark Knight? I don't understand.

Right when I opened up your script, the very first page was wrong. Where is the title page? You can't just have no title page and start a story.

I have no clue at all what Kenny or Curly look like. The only thing I do know is that Curly is wearing the joker mask, yet, i don't care to read on to know why he is wearing the mask.

I started skipping around pages and noticed that huge clunk of dialogue with Kenny on page 4. It should be cut down. And why is it in blue?

Down further I see now the dialogue is red. This is starting to feel more like a mushroom trip more than a story.

There are many other things wrong, but these are the big ones. You should look at some scripts on SS and see what to do and what not to do.
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Posted: December 10th, 2009, 12:29am Report to Moderator
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haha this script is crazy, and definitely not in the good way. when i read the logline, i was hoping to read a script parodying everyone who tries to act and look like the joker. but when i read it, i got the idea that you were actually serious about the subject matter - which is the wrong tone entirely. so what do i recommend? read some of the scripts here on SS and start from scratch. you can try the same subject matter, but i wouldnt recommend it. no one wants to read a script about pathetic fanboys unless its funny or really interesting - because all you have to do is look around yourself to find a boring loser who likes to play dress up while no ones watching. then again, it sounds like i might be getting something here...


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