Dreams: Mirror by Josh J. - Short, Fantasy - Based on a dream. A guy in an interrogation room starts to notice strange events happening around him. 1 page - pdf, format

Too the writer...

I don't recognize your name, so I'll be brief...

This one page epic of yours, did you even bother to run spell check.  Did you even proofread this.  As long as it took you to write this, you couldn't spend a few minutes looking this over?  One page... Josh, there should be no mistakes IMO.  When you put your product out on the market, you want people to buy it.  You want it to be as good as you can get it.

You rushed through this, trying to finish it.  Which is fine, I guess but you have no beginning and you have no end but then again most dreams don't make sense whatsoever and IMO neither does this.

Good Luck,

Ghostwriter

GhostWriter, I admit that I did write this script in a hurry. The reason I wrote this script quickly was because it was based on a dream I had. Right when I woke up, I still remembered the dream so I quickly got up and wrote about it. After I wrote it, I kinda felt rushed to submit it to simplyscripts because I did read over it 2 times and it seemed fine.

It's not my best work obviously. I usually take time writing and reading my scripts. This was just a little short I wanted to have some fun with. I do appreciate and thank you for taking your time to read it though.

Ummm,

Not sure what to make of this to be honest. It would probably work (and be pretty unsettling) as part of a longer script.

It's more like a vignette as it stands, and yes, I agree with Ghost- it comes across as terribly rushed. Okay, it's based on a dream that you had, and you rushed to write it all down, but once it's down, you could have taken a bit of time to play with it a little more.

It's nice to see that you can write in other genres, I was expecting at least one ejaculating penis or semi-offensive vagina reference but I was wrong! Fair play.

Craig

craig, you are very right that I could have taken some time to play with it a little more. I guess I just lost track and felt like submitting it without giving it the few adjustments it needed.

I do realize that this script doesn't have any nudity, or any references to male/female body parts. I am glad about this because I didn't want everyone to think I was only good at one thing. I do plan to write more "safe" stuff in the future, but I do still have a lot of ideas that contain my usual substance.

Quoted from usaking I do still have a lot of ideas that contain my usual substance.

That's good to hear. That wasn't a put down by the way- you know I was a huge fan of 'V', it was just nice to see diversity.

Craig

Usaking... so this belongs to you.  Josh, okay, now I know the name.  You do have a good imagination, this was evident with your script, "V," which was okay IMO.  You thought outside the box in that one.

This is different from what you usually write, so that is good.  You could add two or three pages and salvage this.  No sense in being in a rush, there's no deadline Josh.

Look forward to more of your work.

Ghostwriter

Ghostwriter, thank you for saying I have a good imagination. I always thought my imagination was just "okay", but to hear it is good is very nice.

I didn't really have any way of adding more pages. As said before, I wrote this after I woke up from having a dream and what is written is all I remember in the dream. I didn't want to put anything that wasn't included in the dream because I thought it would be ruined with added stuff.

I know that I shouldn't have rushed posting this. Sometimes I just lose my sense of time and all, and I feel like I have to post a script, even though I shouldn't. It's weird and hard to explain.

My next script should be finished soon. It was actually supposed to be finished 3-4 weeks back, but I have been doing tons of research on two other scripts I am working on. In other words, I have been extremely busy with researching information about two scripts I am not writing while I am finishing writing the script I am currently working on. So yeah, it's tough.

Hey, Josh,
For such a short script there's a lot packed in here. I think it's great, very imaginative, and depicts how I imagine someone might feel after hours, maybe days, of interrogation without sleep.  I loved the bit where the clone cries. It�s very visual but lacks a little something. Maybe the clone could speak, or cry after Josh makes a �confession� or something. Don't think the title does it justice but good job.

Best,

H

harriet, thank you for reading my short script.

This script is based on a dream I had and I didn't want to add anything that was not part of my original dream. I still remember the dream very well today, and there was no talking in it.

The reason I named this script "Dreams: Mirror" is because I was thinking of making some more scripts based on dreams I had long ago that I still remember. That way I could always use the "Dream:..." whenever I want to write about a dream I had.