Werewolves of London by Cindy L. Keller - Short - A man is obsessed with werewolves. 4 pages A WOL script - pdf, format

Cindy,
I loved this. I thought it was visual and dead on kick a$$. The ending was excellent.

Great job. Very enjoyable.

Shawn.....><

Cindy...

Nicely done.  Interesting take on how you approached things here.  The ending was good too I thought.  So In the grand scheme of things this definitely works IMO.

So very good job

Ghost

I think, in terms of this challenge, this script is pretty well done. The lyrics are nicely incorporated without feeling too tacked on.

One thing: when Jim sits inside a lighted room looking out the window, shouldn't the slug be INT. ROOM instead of EXT. MAYFAIR?


Herman

Cindy, Cindy, Cindy...I really like it!  Nice job here.

Well crafted, very visually entertaining, nice job with the lyrics...good story.

I didn't really like Jim singing the chorus again and again, but I guess it works for what it is.  A few little typos, but really well written for eh most part, IMO.

Love it!  Excellent!

Thanks for the reads Shawn, Ghost, Herman, and Jeff.

I'm glad you liked it. It was fun to write, and it was the first thing I've written since the OWC that Mike had for the dark.

Herman, to answer your question, we're seeing Jim from outside as he is inside, and in the window of a lighted room. (Was that more confusing? It sounded that way when I read what I was typing...)  

I've got more reads to get to, but I'll have to do them tomorrow. I just got home from work, and now I have to cook dinner. Feeling a little scattered at the moment.

Thanks everyone for the reads again,
Cindy

Cindy,

I liked it. It actually had a story to it and it was written well. A couple of typos, but I didn't care.

The only thing that didn't really work for me was Jim's singing. It didn't flow right somehow.

Good work!  

Not bad, Cindy.  

An interesting take on the song.

I would change the sub station to Tube.  Wasn't sure what you were talking about at first.

I would also capitalize the first letter of the characters Bartender & Mysterious Man so they stand out on the page.

Not particularly fond of the singing lines, but suppose it works in this short.

All the best,


Javier

Hi Pia and Javier,

Thanks for giving this a read. I used the singing part basically to fill in those words into the script. Jim was a little off or so they thought, so I thought it would work, too. You know, like when a song plays over and over in your head...

Oh well,

Thanks again for reading,

Cindy

Hi Cindy and happy birthday by the way!

I agree with the other guys - nice script. I was thinking that most of these would be very similar but its amazing they aren't!

Good visuals and locales in this. Jim singing? Didn't really bother me. It just adds to the overall weirdness of the song lyrics - did Zevon ever explain if it menat anything?
And why was this great song never used in the classic film, 'An American Werewolf In London'?
Anyone know? maybe WZ wanted too much cash...

Anyway Cindy, enjoyable romp through those london streets!!!

Hey Stevie,

Thanks for the read, and the happy birthday wish. I had a great day, by the way.  

I know, it's pretty neat how different the scripts are for this challenge.
That's why I love to read the OWC scripts, too. Everyone has the same challenge, and they always come out so different.

I'm not sure why Zevon wrote this song, but he must have known it would be a hit for years and years. I'll see if I can dig anything up on that, and why it wasn't used in the movie. Seems like it would have been 'THE SONG' for it. Ya know?

Glad you liked it.
Cindy

stevie,

I did a little digging, and found some interesting stuff.

Phil Everly had asked Zevon and "Waddy" Wadel to write a dance song for the Everly Brothers called The Werewolves of London. So the two sat down together. Zevon had just gotten back from England, so he came up with the first verse. They went back and forth, and came up with this.

In some versions, Zevon mentions Jack Nicholson in the lyrics, often replacing the werewolf in the last verse. (I've never heard this version, but would be neat to hear).

Even though the song came out in 1978, and the movie in 1981, the movie Werewolves of London didn't use it. They used these songs instead: Blue Moon, Moondance, Bad Moon Rising, and some Royal Philharmonic stuff.

Why? I don't know. Couldn't find anything out about it, but the song was used in the movie, The Color of Money.

Hey, Cindy.

Good effort overall on incorporating the lyrics into a full story. Didn't like the scene at Windor Castle though, seemed like it was just chucked in there for no apparent reason other than it's mentioned in the lyrics. As for Jim singing, it's okay, but you should consider cutting it down to a single line instead of having him singing the whole chorus.

Anyway, good work.

Cheers
Rob

Hey Rob,

Thanks for the read.  

How I went about this challenge was to write down my description of each verse as the song played out.

You didn't like their werewolf dance? Aw...

I used it to show that he had followed other werewolves besides the mysterious man, too.

I had a good time writing this challenge. It got me writing again.

Thanks again for the read.

Cindy

Hi Cindy,

I think this one worked pretty well.  You weaved the lyrics into a pretty tight story, and created some nice visuals.  I'm a little iffy on the singing aspect myself, but I don't think it detracts too much.