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Don
Posted: November 7th, 2010, 9:40am
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The Ring Finger by Leonard Chitunhu - Comedy - A group of teens must stop a movie that literally bores people to death. 110 pags - pdf, format
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Trojan
Posted: November 7th, 2010, 10:29am
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Leonard, you've got a number of mistakes in just one page alone. My advice would be to proofread your work thoroughly before submitting on here. If you can't write one page without making obvious errors then I don't like the odds on the other 100 or so pages.
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fionaman
Posted: November 7th, 2010, 12:09pm
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Probably the greatest logline I've read on this site, but Trojan is right, rife with errors. Remember, presentation is everything.
EDIT: Some of the errors in the first page
misspelled words
missing slug lines (in the intercutting)
a missing insert I believe
I might just make this my next read though, I can look past technical errors if theres a good story there
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Marcus Gravy
Posted: November 8th, 2010, 2:35am
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Can I spell check then resubmit it? I had gone over it a couple of times though.
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mcornetto
Posted: November 8th, 2010, 4:04am
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When I first saw your name I thought it said Leonard Cthulhu and I thought, really???
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Marcus Gravy
Posted: November 8th, 2010, 9:34am
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How do you intercut? Should the slug line be over every other transition? Or you can:
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dogglebe
Posted: November 8th, 2010, 9:38am
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You can always resubmit a script. Just tell Don that so he won't post it as a second script.
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