Infinite Insanity by David - Short, Radio Play - An 'epic' sci fi space opera. 9 pages - pdf, format

*sigh*  David, please look up proper screenplay formatting. A lot of people will not even take your piece seriously otherwise.

http://smithcreekstudios.com/smc/SMC_resources_2010.asp

or type in 'screenplay formatting' into google and pick from any of the hits you get.

You've done the hard work of writing a story, now take a few minutes to learn how to format it properly so that people will want to read it.

I got the 'radio script' formatting from finaldraft.com, if it's no good then i'll put it into the standard 'movie' format.

Crikey, John C! What a tone to take with someone.

Amusingly enough, it seems you were wrong.

Anyway, this was a good demo of your dialogue skills and it was a complete enough story that takes a dim view of human behaviour. This would actually probably work quite well as a radio skit.

Particularly liked this: Fuck E.T. What kind of man pokes you in the eye? Dirty
bastard.

What I liked in this case was actually something that dragged down the script - it's reliance on profanities. I think the script would benefit immensely if you chose more elegant ways of expressing the fucks, dickheads, etc. From what I can tell, you're certainly capable of being more creative, as your skills with dialogue seem sharp.

Not bad and I even took it "seriously".