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Don
Posted: August 6th, 2011, 6:42am Report to Moderator
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Freshmeat by ShaDon Manigault - Comedy - A freshman befriends a group of seniors, too bad it's only apart of their senior prank. 113 pages - pdf, format

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change the format to PDF, you're not going to get any reads having it as a word doc.

Also the typical length for a screenplay is roughly 100-120 pages.  Your script is 122 pages, I know this sounds like nit picking on my part, but I checked your script and your margins on dialogue are way off, they stretch the entire page, so your script is probably 130+ pages.  This is too long for a movie script, especially a comedy script which usually runs 100-110 pages.  This tells me that there are a bunch of scenes that don't add to the plot, or character development.  These scenes should be scrapped.

I looked at a few pages in the middle of your script.  The dialogue seemed fine, and the story was okay.  So CREATE A PDF VERSION, GET YOUR LENGTH UNDER 115 PAGES and re-post.
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