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Four Walls by Greg Farnese (geefar) - Short, Drama - An agoraphobic woman struggles to break through her confining disease when her overly domesticated pet cat runs away. 10 pages - pdf, format
not bad, it seems like she's an old lady at the beginning. and for her getting her confidence back to leave the house i would like to see a little more than the obvious.
Amel, There are a few things I need to eliminate and add. Great note on the character's age. I should establish through action that the character is not "old". In the rewrite I will change the main character's arc. Thanks for the notes. Greg
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Its well written. I wanted to find out what's going on, but I didn't get any answers. It's an interesting idea, but it's almost like you didn't know where to go with it. What's the point of the food, lady, and a growling sound? Are they all mirages in his mind? It's not clear. If they are real, nothing seems to get resolved here.