Just Another Day by Sanjay Madhavan - Short - A silent short about a man's lousy day at work. 5 pages - pdf, format

Sanjay,

I took a look at this.

First off.  Don't ever start a script with a man waking up to an alarm clock unless you have a damn good reason. Why?  Because this is the most cliche opening you can ever write.

Next.  Name your characters.  It doesn't matter if we never hear the name on screen.  However, it does make the reading much easier.

Last.  Use active language and don't use We see - because it's always redundant.

If you are around I'll give you additional comments.

Yeah, I'd have to echo what Michael said. Alarm clock cliche, no names, direction (a big negative), and passive voice. Couldn't finish it. Read other screenplays and tweak what you got if its that serious to you. Good luck.