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Posted: March 27th, 2014, 3:58pm Report to Moderator
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So, what are you writing?

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Man Boy - The New Guy Blues (Pilot) by Anthony Nelson - Comedy - It's Mannie's first day in Local City and he's already making all kinds of interesting friends. - pdf, format


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took a look at your script. the download threw me off a bit. i noticed you have the title of the script on every page. never seen that before. the writing is good. the story okay didn't laugh much but does have some potential. good luck

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check out my scripts here....let me know what you think

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i also saw you used series of shots in a way i never seen before. and you use letters from numbering. again never seen that before.


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This might belong in Series. It's only 16 pages.

[bert's note:  moved, thanks]

ugo, you do sometimes see the title on every page (of amateur scripts), I think because of software. On that hosting site it actually helps because of all the ads.    Letters instead of numbers is a valid technique for a MONTAGE although I agree it shouldn't be done like that. Frankly those would be minor issues with that particular script. Check out ONE AFTERNOON in Shorts by the same writer, it is a much better sample.

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