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Wake by Matthew Wake - Short, Fantasy, Romance - Wake has the perfect relationship, but the only place he can be with her, is in his dreams. 6 pages - pdf, format
Read your script and I have a couple of pointers, hope these help!
I think by 'brain detector' you mean some type of device monitoring his brain activity? I think you can come up with a better term for this. 'Brain detector' kind of made me laugh.
A few errors here and there, i.e.
scene 2: '...starring at the sealing...' should be '...staring at the ceiling...' scene 3: '...Wake and the woman is now lying on their sides...' should be 'are'
There's a few more, have a gander and spruce it up.
Are you looking to direct this yourself? If not, there are a far too many cut directions. This is something that should really be kept to a minimum when writing a spec script. And the steady dolly shot is a definite no-no.
Read your script and I have a couple of pointers, hope these help!
I think by 'brain detector' you mean some type of device monitoring his brain activity? I think you can come up with a better term for this. 'Brain detector' kind of made me laugh.
A few errors here and there, i.e.
scene 2: '...starring at the sealing...' should be '...staring at the ceiling...' scene 3: '...Wake and the woman is now lying on their sides...' should be 'are'
There's a few more, have a gander and spruce it up.
Are you looking to direct this yourself? If not, there are a far too many cut directions. This is something that should really be kept to a minimum when writing a spec script. And the steady dolly shot is a definite no-no.
Thanks for reading!
I'll be sure to correct the english gramma. I'm from Denmark, so sometimes a few mistakes here and there!
Yes, I'm going to direct it here in the summer. Also, was thinking about that last "DOLLY shot", I know it's a NO NO, but I want to emphasise the slow exposure of the ending.