All-Mighty by Vince Remo - Drama - Humans are caught in the middle of an epic battle between Angels and Demons. Locked in a web of deceit, humans must pick which side to fight with. Will it be salvation or eternal damnation. The answer lies within the Allmighty. 121 pages - pdf, format

Hey Vince,

I can see why no one has commented on your screenplay as the first lines do need work.

You start with "We hear". This is a"No No" and you don't need direction in a screenplay. "We hear", "We see" etc should never be used and it's the first rule of screenwriting.

Your action lines do read a bit flat and need to be made more interesting.

We hear the beeping of a heart monitor and hissing of an oxygen machine.

Try:   A heart monitor beeps a regular tune as a twisted oxygen hose hisses like a snake.

A BED SURROUNDED BY ABOUT 10, grieving and sniffling family members.

Don't use numbers like "about 10" and why is this all in Caps ?
Try: Several grieving family members fill the room. An abundant supply of tissues.

ON THE BED lies a 70 year old man breathing his last breaths. Oxygen tube plugged into his nostrils.

"Breathing his last breath" this is not filmable, how will the audience know.

Try: A weak and frail TONY (70) struggles to keep his eyes open as the Oxygen hose forces air into his lungs.

Your writing needs work and you need to make the visuals better so the reader will stay interested in what's happening.

Good luck and hope to see a re-write.

Regards Alex