Shooter Number Eight by Reo Maynard - Action, Adventure - Following a rash of base shootings, a government scientist enjoying retirement is dragged back to active duty by the CIA to save America from the menace of a former colleague. - pdf, format

Hi Reo,

Got about a third through your script.

Interesting log as I like this genre.

I like your crisp writing style. Seems well polished. Dialog is good but a bit too heavy so far. After the intro scene not much seems to happen and I get the impression you are 'forcing' your action as though more is going on than really is.

I kinda got bored with the story as is and if not for your writing would prolly have cut out after 15 pages. (whatever that's worth)

Imo you need to get to the stakes/struggle a bit earlier (not easy to do)

Gl with the script
Tony