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Posted: May 10th, 2015, 8:14am Report to Moderator
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The Poly Project by Kendra Peterson - Series, Comedy, Mockumentary - Three lost souls are dumped by their polygamist spouses and sent to live in a house for a reality TV project that will help them become better people. 36 pages - pdf, format


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Int. Interview isn't really a place. Is it still in the studio? Then there's no need to change scene headers. But I guess I understand now, it's like The Office or Modern Family? I checked their scripts, The Office says TALKING HEAD � JIM, and Modern family does INTERVIEW � PHIL, so I guess yours is fine. Maybe take out the INT.

"Enhanced with the finest cosmetics" is sort of silly line. I think it'd be more powerful to describe them.

You do a nice job setting up a bunch of characters fast.

You have some small mistakes in places. Like on page 15, Bobby talks about how he put Scotton's father in his place. But isn't he Scotton's father?

I'm not really sure how the concept plays out. It's original, but the logic behind it is a little weird. It's really frantic. I'm not sure if I'm just tired, but it's confusing or hard to read.


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Thanks  GreenGecko! Since May I have moved on from this script but I wanted to finally get an account to say thanks for reading! Also I get the confusion, Scotton is a very feminine, soft kind of guy which is supposed to be explained when we meet his parents-- Bobby, a large bashful homemaker kind of man who identifies himself as a woman and Martha a rough masculine female who identifies herself as a man.  I should have made that clear in the description.
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