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Don
Posted: May 13th, 2015, 4:16pm Report to Moderator
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So, what are you writing?

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Max & Becky Some People Are Worth Chasing by Meron Dushansky - Action, Adventure - In the near future, an underachiever takes a vacation to rethink his life when a girl, a crime boss, Interpol, and being totally lost in translation give him just what he needs. 82 pages - pdf, format


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Meron,

I don't get the title. Since it's action, why not just call it "chasing max and betty?"

Then you use an entire page 2 to describe this guys morning routine. Boring.

So much "tell"  in the action blocks. Your writing and  formatting, on the plus side,  is not bad,  just the content is slow as molasses. You sure this is action?

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