Pillock of Society by Preston Thyme - Short, Comedy - They are crusaders of the time- space continuum, re-aligning moments of time for the betterment of humanity. Well, that was the plan anyway.  6 pages - pdf, format

Kind of reminded me, without the science, of Les Travelleurs...the French film. Dumb master clever, side kick. Or should that be  Don Quixote etc etc

Some good lines and a decent basis, Ie travelling to the wrong time. Not much superhero, more time traveller , but hey who cares.

Fair effort for a week, but needs a few tweaks to really fly...boom boom

A few good laughs. Can't say that much of anything happened but this strikes me as a great character study. Good dialogue.

Nice work.

It was funny.  The dialog was smart, funny.  Not much happened.  

How does someone that dumb get to be in charge?  You should make him like the leader's idiot brother or something like that.

It was a bit odd.  Also, you have no indication of where they are at all.  Open doesn't really say much.  And if it's that open wilderness, then why would anyone travel that part of it?

A good effort.  One of the better ones so far.

7/10

Dan

First - it met all of the parameters of the challenge - Noice!

Solidly written - good format/structure.

I did get a few chuckles here -

Overall, nice job.

I'm guessing Brit effort from the title...

Some very funny dialogue on display here, Bieber presidency -

But the story sort of just petered out..

Shame I was enjoying that!

Yeah, pretty good and some funny lines. Again, needs much more one liners and stuff cos of the 6 page thing. But some nice puns in here!

7 laughs out of 10

Enjoyable read. Pretty funny throughout.

Are time travelers, superheroes?  I guess they're saving the planet one thing at a time... especially stopping a Bieber president

The writing was tight.

Good job on entering

Preston Thyme,

This one was pretty funny, but kind of fizzled out at the end. I liked the two heroes and the idea of the quite obviously mentally challenged main hero. Just needed more at the end.

Nice one, though.

Glenn.

Writer,

I liked the premise of this one. I think it could have had quite a few more laughs if handled a but differently. There was a lot of chatter between Continuum an his sidekick, and thy seemed where most of your jokes were. However, it tired after a while. Where you succeeded, IMO, is when the couple came riding up in the wagon. Now that was hilarious. Pretty good job.

Steve

Liked the title, the script's pretty good too. Positives are natural dialogue, the relationship between our two hero's and the scenario. Limited by the six pages, I'd like to see that doubled to figure out how they survived ye olde times.

Good work

Reminds me of a Monty Python type sketch. It can still fly today, but came across as a little dated to me. I can see this being highly appreciated by some though. Nice job.

Good job.  Nothing like being clueless, and I liked the tie in to the contest.  Well done.

This one started reading like a pisser to me. I groaned when CM said, “Well, of course our challenge was…” and then explained everything for the audience. Maybe that was intentional but that opening scene felt flat and was annoying. However, the writer showed exceptional skill in the scene between the peasants and our two heroes. It was well written and funny, I was really warming up to this and then it just ended. This needs to either have the beginning cut a lot shorter or more pages but it has potential for sure.

-Mark

There's a wrong page break on p 1-2. I read it all but didn't enjoy much of it. Too much talking, far less action. It didn't grab me, sorry. Others seem to like it, so what...