Straight off the bat, we have some issues:
A MAN, early 30s, is sitting on a bench watching the pub
from a distance. Patient, pensive, hands in his jacket
pockets. This is GRANT.
Why introduce the same character twice in the same block of action. It serves no purpose. "Grant, early 30's" would be fine.
Also, some passive writing which I imagine will continue throughout the script. This would be better, "sits on a bench and watches a/the pub"
Okay, I've finished reading it now.
I enjoyed it, it's a simple yet effective premise. Would be easy to film.
There is a lot of dialogue but it felt natural for the most part. I really enjoyed Adam's monolog from the end of page 6 onto page 7. I usually cringe when I see big blocks of dialogue like that but it was very effective.
I can definitely see something like this being made.