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Posted: May 21st, 2017, 10:25am Report to Moderator

So, what are you writing?

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Personal Incorrectness by John Rainone - Series, Comedy - {no logline} 38 pages - pdf, format

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Posted: May 21st, 2017, 1:38pm Report to Moderator

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I would suggest adding a logline, a brief sentence on what the script is about. Scripts without one usually don't get many reads.

I read the first couple of pages, and I'm very confused. I don't know what the point is here, the dialogue seems very unnatural, and the formatting is off. I would suggest reading more. I don't know if this type of formatting is something I don't know about, but it definitely doesn't follow the traditional screenplay format.

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