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Posted: June 17th, 2017, 11:10am Report to Moderator
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Pr*ck! by Todd Bronson - Horror - An isolated desert community must struggle to survive a devastating onslaught of mutant cacti. - A grindhouse twist and homage to atomic, 3D creature features. 105 pages

contest: Won Best Feature Script at Independent Horror Movie Awards 2017; Finalist at 13Horror.com Film and Screenplay Contest; An award winning script at International Horror Hotel; 7 rating on The Black List with coverage. - pdf, format

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I immediately noticed right away, after the first FADE IN, you said "A FBI AGENT", but shouldn't it be "AN* FBI AGENT"? I could be actually be wrong, but it read weird the other way... also, when you mention "the nerd" and "the agent" in the description narrative, you should actually capitalize them as The Nerd and The Agent, because that is who you introduced them as characters. Anyways it seems to be written very well, I'll keep reading when I have time!
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I went back and forth between "A" and "An" quite a few times. Thanks for the comments.  
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