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Don
Posted: July 12th, 2017, 7:14pm Report to Moderator
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So, what are you writing?

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The Taured Effect (Pilot) by Joel Heath - Series, Action, Adventure, Sci Fi - When a CIA operative is arrested in modern day, Nazi-controlled London for having a faked passport where she receives the biggest shock of all…The United States doesn’t exist. 53 pages - pdf, format

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Read a few pages - not bad at all - I like your style.  One nit, I think you are handling SUPERS wrong, e.g., you have:


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EXT. DESERT - NIGHT

Super “Afghanistan - 0200 hours.”

A full moon hangs in the night sky, a snow-capped mountain
sits on the horizon partially cloaked in darkness.


The SUPER should be in caps and needs to follow a brief description (i.e., it has to be Superimposed over something. So the above could be:

EXT. DESERT - NIGHT

A full moon hangs in the night sky, a snow-capped mountain
sits on the horizon partially cloaked in darkness.

SUPER: AFGHANISTAN - 02000 HOURS


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