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Don
Posted: July 21st, 2017, 10:36pm Report to Moderator
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The July OWC scripts:

* I will move the "DQ'd" scripts off and post them after the Challenge is over.

In A Pinch by Sebastian the Crab - Short, Drama - A woman returning home to take over her family's legacy finds it's much harder than she ever imagined. 11 pages - pdf, format

Don't Look by 0 - Short, Horror - On the way home from her night shift at work, a young woman experiences deer, car troubles, a farmhouse, a mother with terminal cancer, her anti-social daughter, and a terrifying revelation that shocks her to the core… 10 pages - pdf, format

Did Everyone Pay Their Dues by 0 - Short, Drama - Members of a legendary rock band visit the site of their most infamous concert.   12 pages - pdf, format

The Daughter of Gore by Gorden Lewis - Short, Horror - A woman trying to start over in life just can't get away from the sins of her infamous dad. 12 pages - pdf, format

Dream by some dude with a wicked haircut - Short, Mystery, Thriller - John Reaper, a hired assassin sent to the land of the rising sun is tasked with killing a mark, but he's not alone, he has the company of his alternate personality with him, a foul mouthed sadist that loves to kill. 11 pages - pdf, format

Mountain City by 0 - Short, Drama - After the tragic death of his mother, a city boy is forced to live with his estranged father in the hills of Tennessee. 9 pages - pdf, format

Junkyard by Sylvester Ritter - Short, Thriller, Black Comedy - After a police officer chases a young black man into a junkyard, the simple pot bust gets very messy. (Warning: extremely offensive language throughout) 12 pages - pdf, format

A Deathly Shade of Blue by Salman Rushdie - Short, Thriller - A refugee discovers that England is just like home. 9 pages - pdf, format

The First Step by Lord Nelson - Short, Drama - With her marriage hanging on by a thread, a tired wife struggles with the limits of just how much she can take.  10 pages - pdf, format

White Icing In Blackwater Creek by Anonymous - Short, Drama - A teenage beauty hangs onto childhood memories in an effort to adjust to the truth of devastation caused by wildfires in her hometown. She leaves for a change of scenery and It takes a Native Indian to turn her sadness around, but the truth, in the end, she may never learn. 12 pages - pdf, format

Life Through Death by 0 - Short, Thriller - When a desperate attempt to rescue the leader of a resistance fails, she chooses to live through death. 11 pages - pdf, format

Take 2 by Anonymous X - Short, Comedy - A salesman tries to sell a device from out of the past that has no use today. 9 pages - pdf, format

Mama Bear by 8252017MEC - Short, Drama - When two young women marry and adopt a baby the haters gather like vultures. However, they fail to take into account the love the women have for each other and the innate ferocious defensiveness of a Mama Bear.  10 pages - pdf, format

The Probe by Maheetma Trausasnake - Short, Romance, Comedy - After enduring unspeakable torment at his new job, a nerdy guy finds revenge - and love - may have just crawled in his bedroom window. 12 pages - pdf, format

The Atom and Eve by Also Blank - Short, Drama - A woman travels through a strange and dangerous land to reach her final resting place. 12 pages - pdf, format

The Hangman With No Name by Cook - Short, Thriller, Drama - A man awakens handcuffed in a mysterious room. Though no recollection of how he got there, a masked duo wrongly interrogates him.  9 pages - pdf, format

The Last Wish by 0 - Short, Drama - A Clown tries to talk Death into letting him die in his own home 10 pages - pdf, format

Red on Yellow by Sir Vival - Short, Dramedy - Two Amazonian tribesmen encounter a mysterious beast destroying their forest. - pdf, format

Plight by blank - Short, Drama - Alone, a young boy struggles with a massive storm on the Mediterranean Sea, but his real fight awaits him onshore. 10 pages - pdf, format

Don't Talk To Strangers by your name here - Short, Thriller - Don't walk the streets alone. 9 pages - pdf, format

Shalom, Naziboy by 0 - Short, Thriller - The granddaughter of a Holocaust victim sends a quirky merc to the apartment of a German neo-Nazi, the grandson of her ancestor's murderer, to abduct him for a talk on a Jewish cemetery. 11 pages - pdf, format


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Good job, everyone!  I look very forward to see what you all came up with.


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Will read a couple now - its early Sunday morn here in Oz - then have a busy day till this arve where I will read the rest


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Folks,

Tomorrow I'll start posting the '*' to indicate if the writer has written at least one review of an OWC script.

- Don


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Through more than half - going to take a break to get a readjustment. For me, far too many did not meet the Stranger in a Strange land theme so I'm thinking maybe it's just me being an arse.

Good night's sleep and fresh eyes and will re-examine some of the ones I have already read.


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Quoted from eldave1
Through more than half - going to take a break to get a readjustment. For me, far too many did not meet the Stranger in a Strange land theme so I'm thinking maybe it's just me being an arse.

Good night's sleep and fresh eyes and will re-examine some of the ones I have already read.


It's not you, Dave...I agree 100% and am kinda bummed peeps couldn't just take a rather simple challenge and run with it.


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Being a stranger in a strange land is a bit subjective. What may seem normal to most people could be a strange place for another. For example, me walking into a nail salon. A strange place could be also be interpreted as a state of mind, circumstances or set of conditions. I've only read a few so far but I can see how all of them fit the theme so far. You have to expect the writers to push at those boundaries as much as they can so I'm expecting some rather loose interpretations this contest which I'm ok with. As long as there is an attempt to run with the premise.


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IMO the limit on the number of people took out many of the better ideas.  How do you effectively show the isolation of a character.

Just for ex, showing 3 kids playing ball with a 4th being left out isn't nearly as effective as showing an entire class.  There are many more ideas that were crippled by the limit.

Even the idea of having a single room with 4 people isn't as effective as no limit.

It wasn't as bad as when I had to write a femme fatale without any men, but the rules didn't work well at all.  It'd be like writing a horror story where no one can die or be scared of dying.

Oh I won't be able to read anything till Mon but will read many if not all by Fri.  When do we need to be done with reviews?

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I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good.  I enjoy writing the same.  Looking to team with anyone!

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Quoted from eldave1
Through more than half - going to take a break to get a readjustment. For me, far too many did not meet the Stranger in a Strange land theme so I'm thinking maybe it's just me being an arse.

Good night's sleep and fresh eyes and will re-examine some of the ones I have already read.


Yeh I've got that feel too. I've let a couple away with it as they were borderline, but I guess it's down to reader discretion.

Also, spotted that Windows script seems to have gone. Didn't mean to annoy the author with my review, but it didn't meet the page count and I couldn't see the obvious stranger in a strange land requirement being met. Shame they didn't keep it in as it wasn't a terrible script, just didn't meet the parameters required.


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I enjoyed reading what everyone else came up with. Sometimes I feel like I'm being too harsh with my reviews though, especially since I almost always pick up on formatting/grammar issues. But I guess that's just the perfectionist in me. I take screenwriting very seriously, as I'm sure everyone else does as well, otherwise why would we be here?... And I study a lot on the subject, and when I read, "not so great", scripts, it kind of gets to me... I try to be as nice as I can though, and I only try to help out. If ever anyone thinks I am rude, I apologize. I don't think I am, but I'm just saying - in case...

With that being said, I enjoyed this challenge, it was my first ever OWC. However, I am so bummed and disappointed because my ending was rushed/forced, and I didn't have a choice. I was writing my script on writerduet.com (the free version) and literally the night before this was due, pop up blocks on the website kept interfering and would not allow me to continue the script... And I was at the very end of it. The day it was due, I was busy and had no access to a laptop... until about an hour or so before the deadline was due, that's when I hurried up, got back on, and pounded the rest of it out. Ugh. Such disappointment.

Oh well enough of my rambling. Like I said I just enjoyed the challenge and it was good practice, and I'm glad I still entered, rather than not at all. And congratulations to everyone else who entered as well.

I look forward to the next challenge(s) and whatever else comes our way.
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Quoted from CameronD
B.... You have to expect the writers to push at those boundaries as much as they can so I'm expecting some rather loose interpretations this contest which I'm ok with. As long as there is an attempt to run with the premise.


I kind of view it polar opposite of this. I don't expect writers to push at these boundaries as much as they can (i.e., ostensibly to to fit something into the parameter). Instead, I expect the opposite. i.e., Writers pushing their imagination as much as they can to come up with something that fits into the boundaries. Otherwise - why not just have open challenges?


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Quoted from Tyler King
I enjoyed reading what everyone else came up with. Sometimes I feel like I'm being too harsh with my reviews though, especially since I almost always pick up on formatting/grammar issues. But I guess that's just the perfectionist in me. I take screenwriting very seriously, as I'm sure everyone else does as well, otherwise why would we be here?... And I study a lot on the subject, and when I read, "not so great", scripts, it kind of gets to me... I try to be as nice as I can though, and I only try to help out. If ever anyone thinks I am rude, I apologize. I don't think I am, but I'm just saying - in case...

With that being said, I enjoyed this challenge, it was my first ever OWC. However, I am so bummed and disappointed because my ending was rushed/forced, and I didn't have a choice. I was writing my script on writerduet.com (the free version) and literally the night before this was due, pop up blocks on the website kept interfering and would not allow me to continue the script... And I was at the very end of it. The day it was due, I was busy and had no access to a laptop... until about an hour or so before the deadline was due, that's when I hurried up, got back on, and pounded the rest of it out. Ugh. Such disappointment.

Oh well enough of my rambling. Like I said I just enjoyed the challenge and it was good practice, and I'm glad I still entered, rather than not at all. And congratulations to everyone else who entered as well.

I look forward to the next challenge(s) and whatever else comes our way.


Haven't seen anything from you that I would classified as rude.


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Ok good. Like I said I didn't think I was either but I know I can come across that way to some people sometimes without realizing it.
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Quoted from eldave1
I kind of view it polar opposite of this. I don't expect writers to push at these boundaries as much as they can (i.e., ostensibly to to fit something into the parameter). Instead, I expect the opposite. i.e., Writers pushing their imagination as much as they can to come up with something that fits into the boundaries. Otherwise - why not just have open challenges?


Agreed 1000000000000000000000000%!!!!!!!



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Okay - done (it helps being retired

There were three on the top of my list - going to take another run through the others to see if I missed a gem somewhere.  I did enjoy the varied themes.


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