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Don
Posted: October 1st, 2017, 9:53am Report to Moderator
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So, what are you writing?

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Soupman by Christopher Donald - Short, Comedy - An invulnerable superhero discovers masochistic pleasure when a rival causes him pain for the very first time. 7 pages - pdf, format

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You need a new scene heading for this:


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Soupman flies over the buildings with the mugger in his
arms. The mugger struggles and grunts.


Sorry, didn't really get the point of the story.


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If they can make a superhero franchise out of a 'Bananaman'. I'm sure there is a story somewhere for 'Soupman'.


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I was hoping your title would lead to a worthy comedic story.  It didn't.
Soupman???

Still trying to figure out what you were going for.

"No soup for you"!!!!!

JJ
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HyperMatt
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Read it.
Why is he call soupman, just described as a man in boots and cape.


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Hi Christopher,

I had a read and whilst I felt it might have potential, I think it needs quite a bit of work.

If you've not given up on it, I'd be interested to see how it develops though.

It's probably also worth asking yourself why are you writing something about a superhero too, because it's very unlikely to get made, cos that kind of thing costs a bomb!

Good luck

Max


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