Popsy by Lee Ford Jackson - Horror - {no logline} 168 pages - pdf, format

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I wanted to comment onthe page length but then opened it and saw what you wrote there on the title page. It's first two series and I don't know how long they should be.
But I do know that formatting of any series stays the same as of features. Your formatting is seriously off - you're directing all of your shots. The dialog is skewed all kind of ways. I think you couls look up some of the shorts or features here onthe site, the unproduced ones and reformat this accordingly.