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Snake Cam (currently 804 views) |
Don |
Posted: May 10th, 2018, 2:22pm |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16381 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
Snake Cam by Steven Clark - Short, Comedy - Awakened by thirst, a middle-aged Dad is in for the surprise of his life. 2 pages - pdf format
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------------- You will miss 100% of the shots you don't take. - Wayne Gretzky
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Thimmy |
Posted: May 17th, 2018, 6:44am |
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You've probably seen prank videos on Youtube. This story is little more than a prank video. The end product could still turn out better than a prank video, but then it's not so much about the script, but rather thanks to the rest: directing, acting, cinematography, audio, editing etc. |
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SAC |
Posted: May 17th, 2018, 8:51am |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3201 Posts Per Day 0.79 |
Hi, thanks for reading. Yes, I’ve seen many prank videos on You Tube. I love them. There’s not much to this script. It doesn’t rank anywhere near my best. But I’d just gotten new screenwriting software and I wanted to try it out, so I came up with this ridiculous little short.
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Forgive |
Posted: May 18th, 2018, 5:32pm |
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Old Timer Let The Sky Fall
LocationVarious, exotic. Posts1373 Posts Per Day 0.27 |
Uh, it's a little more than a prank video if it's got acting, directing, audio, and editing ... and a script; which means it's not a prank video then? Well this worked nice for me, could be produced nice and cheap, and I do get thimmy's point, a nice acting turn could really make the difference. As well as good directing, editing n audio. Nicely written though. |
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SAC |
Posted: June 27th, 2018, 12:18pm |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3201 Posts Per Day 0.79 |
This just got picked up by a producer in North Carolina who runs a non profit called Girls Rock Film Camp. Each year they produce, direct and edit short films in a one week time frame then debut the results in a closing ceremony. Nice to hear they chose this, which was just something I banged out after getting Final Draft 10 to see how it works!
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Philostrate |
Posted: July 16th, 2018, 12:33pm |
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Hey Steve, It's well written and made me laugh, so it served its purpose. Congrats for it being picked up David |
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SAC |
Posted: July 16th, 2018, 8:31pm |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3201 Posts Per Day 0.79 |
Forgive (Simon?),
Thanks for your nice comments earlier. Much appreciated.
David,
Thanks for reading. Appreciate the kind words. Let me know if you have something new on the boards you want looked at.
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LC |
Posted: July 16th, 2018, 11:08pm |
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LocationThe Great Southern Land Posts7582 Posts Per Day 1.34 |
Hello, Mr Clark. Nice. Made me laugh, so mission accomplished. The pedant in me draws your attention to 'lightning fast', not 'lightening' - unless of course he's getting his hair done. And one final qualm: Father to son, right? 'You son of a bitch' sounds a bit harsh to my ear. That said: Congrats on the quick pick up! How do you rate FD10, then? Improvements worth updating? |
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SAC |
Posted: July 17th, 2018, 12:21pm |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3201 Posts Per Day 0.79 |
Libby,
Thanks for the lightning notice. Good to know going forward. Guess that just slipped.
There are plenty of times my kids make my blood boil and I need to restrain myself. Any my oldest is eight. So I figure once a kid hits his teenage years then it won’t be that big a deal. Or would it? I don’t know. Sure feels good blowing off steam.
FD 10. I never used FD 9, so it’s all new to me. Honestly, I just wanted a clear upgrade in font, believe it or not. A few people said my formatting seems off in some of my old scripts, and, truthfully, the spacing did seem off. So, it’s def an upgrade, and they say all the big shots in Hollywood use it. Funny, but it’s not working. I feel I should’ve had my million dollar seller by now! |
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CindyLKeller |
Posted: July 27th, 2018, 4:32pm |
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Hi Steven, I see this one got picked up. Congrats. Nicely written and funny. I can see why it got picked up. It would be fun to watch. Lol Cindy |
| Award winning screenwriter Available screenplays TINA DARLING - 114 page Comedy ONLY OSCAR KNOWS - 99 page Horror A SONG IN MY HEART - 94 page Drama HALLOWEEN GAMES - 105 page Drama
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SAC |
Posted: July 27th, 2018, 9:32pm |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3201 Posts Per Day 0.79 |
Hi Steven, I see this one got picked up. Congrats. Nicely written and funny. I can see why it got picked up. It would be fun to watch. Lol Cindy |
Thanks, Cindy! Appreciate the kind words. Hopefully, they do film it (things can always change). |
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CindyLKeller |
Posted: July 28th, 2018, 12:43pm |
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Old Timer
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Well, I hope not. |
| Award winning screenwriter Available screenplays TINA DARLING - 114 page Comedy ONLY OSCAR KNOWS - 99 page Horror A SONG IN MY HEART - 94 page Drama HALLOWEEN GAMES - 105 page Drama
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irish eyes |
Posted: August 2nd, 2018, 8:02pm |
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January Project Group There`s too much blood in my alcohol
LocationUpstate New York Posts1865 Posts Per Day 0.37 |
Wow this is probably your best work. Although English is not your strong point it was a enjoy to read |
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SAC |
Posted: August 2nd, 2018, 8:48pm |
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Of The Ancients … but some dreams do
LocationUpstate NY Posts3201 Posts Per Day 0.79 |
Wow this is probably your best work. Although English is not your strong point it was a enjoy to read |
Comments are now closed, sir. Go polish your script. |
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