Arisen by Fernand Smith - Horror - In the small town of Evansfield, a demon of vast power has laid in wait for 13 years - waiting to be freed by those who practice the ways of evil; waiting to unleash his horrifying power upon the world; and waiting to exact revenge on those who trapped him. However, the demon needs a host to possess in order to wreck havoc on Evansfield and the world. - html format.

I'm thinking about doing a prequel to this script.

Something made this script very difficult to get into and i therefore could not finish reading the script. That something was the dialogue. Every character reads the same, the characters are not seperated with their speech, making it seem like the same character over and over again just with different names. There also seems to be a lack of decription on what the characters are doing. Basically you need to make your characters actually characters, give them more personality etc. The story seems good and i will try to finish reading it its just the characters let it down

The story sorta reminded me of the movie, End of Days with Arnold Schwarzenegger. There are a lot of grammar errors in it and when you're writing an emotion that a character is feeling as he's talking, write it after their name, not after their line.
I.E.

AMY
(scared)
What do we do now?

Also, I think Amy's character is down-played. She seems really dumb and always asking questions. She is a cop as well as Michael and she needs to be a little 'tougher.'

The characters can have a little more personality to them.

The story was good, though, and it did keep my interest. Just go back and look over the grammar errors and give the characters a little more oomph.  Good luck and keep writing!

We the production team at Rising Sun Studios(Ballymena,Europe.) wish to raise your attention to the fact that we have already made a film entitled Arisen. We order you to stop all pre-production on your stolen script idea.
However we are willing to negotiate on terms of copyright as regards the title of the film. We have read the script and feel that the basic themes and characters are different from your "orignal" script.
We are willing to accept anything over £10,000(sterling) for use of this. However I fel we can come to some sort of agreement that is not finical, believe it or not we are not making films solely for profit so a mention in the credits would do.

We will say in contact through this message board,
          Yours sincerly
                                The Rising Sun Team.

We did...,

1. I doubt you have a copyright on the title of the film.  You will note that in imdb.com there are half a dozen movies that go by the title "speed". 

2. You state, "We have read the script and feel that the basic themes and characters are different from your "orignal"[sic] script." So, if your script and the unproduced script posted here are different and only share a similar name, there is no copyright violation going on.  Also, to the best of my knowledge, I know of no case where a single verb has been copyrighted. 

So, you have no authority to stop any production of a script which, by your own admission, is different from your work.  Also, you have no grounds to demand any money from the writer of the script.

Thanks,

Don
webmaster

We also did;


1. Copyrighted the script and title in 1998 and since then have renewed this copyright at great expense on a yearly basis. We did not perform this task so it could be ripped off by a talentless script writer who seems to draw inspiration from lack-lusture horror movies of the 70's.

2. I feel deeply insulted that a webmaster so low down in the food chain attempt to challenge the force of the Rising Sun Production Company.

Perhaps your lack of respect is the reason why you a re writing unproduced scripts whilst we are actually making films.

We tried to play fair but it seems you have no interst in the art of film-making or giving credit to those who rightfully deserve it.

We did this film before youse:

1.  If you have copyrighted the script, then why don't you prove it, rather than making baseless claims. 

2. So, now you are Rising Sun Production Company.  Has a better ring to it than Rising Sun Studios. 

3. I'm the webmaster, not the author of the script, Arisen.

4. Play fair?  You are unbelievably bad at trying to extort money from someone who writes a script that happens to have the same name as your 'production'.  At the very least, you could have had the common courtesy of getting your spelling right.

Don
webmaster

Ahhhahahahahahahahahahahaha!  No real production company would flat out insult the writer and webmaster 6th grade style like that....then again...

"so low down in the food chain attempt to challenge the force of the Rising Sun Production Company." 
Is Rising Sun Studios (or is it Production Company?) high in the food chain...cause I sure haven't heard of them.  And don't challenge their force...its like they refer to themselves as hurricanes.

And a really good name too : we did this film before youse.....classy

I am sorry that I have insulted you, but trying to lower my communication ability just to get through to your fragile little mind seems like an impossible task. So far you have no evidence that you have any video footage of that so-called script which I have had the 'pleasure' to read. Although the story seems to be average, the dialogue between characters is appalling. I have compared your script to our finished product and it shows that in conclusion that script is an embarrassment to anyone who dares to read it. There is no originality, it sounds like a very bad re-working of a Stephen King story. Next time you decide to write a script try not to rip him off so badly. Enough of these petty arguments, I think the fact that we have a finished film and all you have is a horrible script, shows we have a better chance of winning any court case. All you can settle for is second best.
And the fact you have not heard of our highly successful independent film comes as a blessing to the members of our company. So exactly when this goes further than it should, what do you have to say in defence of that writer?

To the 'we did this film before youse' people.

I wanna know where i can get a copy of this film - i really wanna see it as it sounds like it should be some kinda masterpeice but yet can't find any reference to it anywhere except on this thread.

Is there some place I can order it from?

Quoted Text I am sorry that I have insulted you, but trying to lower my communication ability just to get through to your fragile little mind seems like an impossible task.

You've made it very, very clear.  You've made a movie.  The movie's name is Arisen.  The themes and character of your movie, Arisen, are different from the themes and characters of the unproduced script also named Arisen within this message board.  Your movie and the unproduced script here share the same name.

Quoted Text So far you have no evidence that you have any video footage of that so-called script which I have had the 'pleasure' to read.

Of course there is no evidence of any video footage.  That is why this script is in the "Unproduced Screenplay Discussion" thread. 

Quoted Text Although the story seems to be average, the dialogue between characters is appalling. I have compared your script to our finished product and it shows that in conclusion that script is an embarrassment to anyone who dares to read it. There is no originality, it sounds like a very bad re-working of a Stephen King story. Next time you decide to write a script try not to rip him off so badly.

Thanks for reading the script and giving your thoughts.

Quoted Text Enough of these petty arguments, I think the fact that we have a finished film and all you have is a horrible script, shows we have a better chance of winning any court case. All you can settle for is second best.

That remains to be seen.

Quoted Text And the fact you have not heard of our highly successful independent film comes as a blessing to the members of our company.

I have no idea what this means.

Quoted Text So exactly when this goes further than it should, what do you have to say in defence of that writer?

Haven't you been paying attention?

Don
webmaster

I find it amusing this guys seems to think anyone who responds to this thread is in fact the writer of the script and feels the need to call their work horrible.

I didn't write this script...I just thought it was funny some guy is actually getting worked up over a script some kat just wrote and wanted to show his friends.

You cant copyright a title, end of story. Period. Flat out. You cant even copyright a story. And, being the son of a lawyer, pretty much since you just admitted it here you've lost all hope of winnig any claim you might want to file. This diddy here, can and would be used in court, as its the setting of the conflict.

There are also a few things that tip off the fact you have no idea what youre talking about/youre an ameteur.

1) No real prodco would sit there and insult new writers. So, what youre saying is your first script won an academy award, right? I didnt think so. If you were a real prodco youd know all writers suck, at one point. And any prodco whos wasting their time tossing insults at a new writer for the fun of it certainly isnt a GOOD one.

2) to quote you "And the fact you have not heard of our highly successful independent film comes as a blessing to the me ..."

What? You DONT want to be known? Ok, thats a good way to go out of busniess real f-ing quick, but ok.

3) IF you were really in the know you would know all about copyright laws, which you clearly dont. You say you went to great expense to renew the copyright every year?? ERRR! worng. You dont renew one every year, you renew every five years, in most cases (ill submit defeat on this one if you show me proof its every year, which is NOT how the WGA does their copyright stuff, they do it every five years, and ALL industry pros have their work copyrighted with them). You say you spent great expense?? ERRR wrong again. At most its 30 bucks each time you do it, which again shoudl be every five years according to the WGA. So youre not only wrong, youre lying too.

4) You know those little disclaimers you SHOULd have put on your film? The ones about "Any similarity between your characters and ours is purely coincidental"? something to that extent anyway. That goes both ways. You cant sue him unless its BLATANTLY obvious, beyond all reasonable doubt in a court of law, and he cant sue you. Oh, what, you DIDNT put one? Oh well then perhaps you'll just be sued by EVERY SINGLE writer in America because you didnt put the disclaimer. A real prodco would have known that.

If theres not proff beyond all doubt that he ripped you off, copyright or no, disclaimer or no, then you got nothin. Theres a billion writers out there, and only som many stories and so many titles. Just because he has the same title as yours doesnt mean you can order him to shut it down (Which you would have done through a lawyer in private if you were REAL prodco). If it did, there would be no end to the lawsuits in Hollywood.

Mel Gibson would have to sue Steven Seagal because both of their films were named "The Patriot". I would get to sue Chris Walked AND Smallville, because, for Walken, his move is named Adrenaline and, for Smallville, they had a supervillian that was charged up with adrenaline, which is EXACTLY the nature of my story. I could have sued them , or tried to anyway, hell could have done it for free, my moms a lawyer. But I didnt, you know why? Because I would have lost them both. Unless you can PROVE he stole it from it YOU WILL LOSE.

Why would a production company sign up here unless they planned to rip of an original idea for there own gain, maybe you stole the writer's idea and he should be the one crying like you (The whiney company guy, I mean)