Six Down by Ryan Smith - Short, Horror - This is an homage to all those cheesy saturday night movies with those corny murder plots. Police officer Randall Murphy has seen a sudden string of murders the killer keeps striking again and again. The story unravels into a pretty predictable ending. - pdf, format

Okay, I got about halfway through and couldnt handle much more. It's not that your writing is bad, it's more the overall formatting.

The opening was weird, the way you describe this or that happening for five to seven seconds- there's really no need. Describe what happens, describe what the camera sees. Leave it to director or editor to decide how many seconds something lasts.

Your scenes are numbered and you have a lot of transitions and camera directions. As above, this is not needed for a spec script, it gets in the way.

In your description you rarely use punctuation i can tolerate a few missed commas but when you miss periods or as we Brits like to say full stops it gets very annoying as you can probably tell from reading this sentence if i can justify calling it that.

These are just a few problems. Like I say, I didnt read all the way through. I noticed some of your dialogue was a little on the nose and sometimes the guys didn't really sound like cops.

With a reformat and some added punctuation, I think this might be pretty good.

I suggest you read through the entries to dogglebe's short script contest which appear on this thread. They are all well written and well formatted. See if you can adopt that kind of formatting in your work. You'll find it reads much better.