Problem with Inserting, help! --corect my writenings!



INT. CAFE BAR

...

Suddenly he takes his wallet out and hands her visit CARD
which says.,

 -- ANONYMOUS CARD

  -- Tel. 9988.5333

   -- Try to catch me!

    -- By: Nameless XXX :-)

Guy hands her his card, but as she reaches for it, Guy
quickly draws it back. She attempts again and this time she
gets it. But, Guy refuses to leave her the card ...

...

INT. GARAGE - DAY

He takes exactly the same decoder the thieves used from his
desk, presses the button and the red display starts reading
DIGITAL CODES.,

 1, 2, 3, 4

  2, 3, 4, 5

   3, 4, 5, 6

Within a couple of seconds, the decoder finds the right
code: The numbers "7,8,9,6" are blinking. Beep, Z3 is
unlocked.
       
        GUY
    (cheerfully)
    This is it!!!

no idea, but don't use real telephone no's, always use 555 then something. You could have a lawsuit for using a real phone #.

Danny

I'm also not sure what the problem is. You mean how do you show information on the card as an 'insert'?


 Suddenly he takes his wallet out and hands her his card.

 INSERT

   555-98833
   Try to catch me!
   Nameless, XXX

 As she reaches for it, Guy quickly draws it back.


The 'INSERT' takes on the role of a Scene Heading with the words as dialogue almost. Indent a couple spaces and that's one way which should be good enough. For the second example, there is no advantage to inserting the numbers. Everyone has seen films where the digital counter goes down, so unless the exact sequence you describe has any bearing (I can't see that it does) simply describe the action taking place:


 The red display starts reading DIGITAL CODES.  Numbers spin.  In
 seconds, the decoder finds the right code:

   7-8-9-6

 BEEP.  The Z3 is unlocked.
       
                     GUY
           That's it.

Jonwood's got the right idea.  Don't get too hung up those inserts though.  You should primarily be concerned with whether the scene makes sense and that it flows.  In the context of things just as is, I'm kind of lost.