My first treatment for a script. I am going to use this as an excercise for the book "Story" (Robert McKee) I am reading right now. Please let me know your thoughts on it:

JANO (8) and JAI (10), while playing in their backyard find a CUCKOO almost dead in a thorny bush. While Jai runs out to fetch his nasty friends, Jano has gently taken out the cuckoo out of the bush. A gentle flap of it's wings and a sound of what seems like a chirp was all it was needed for Jano to think that the cuckoo is not dead. She knows what her brother is planning to do. They want to take it to the mad singer who lives 2 blocks away, who believes that eating a cuckoo would make his voice more sweeter and would pay anyone who brings him a cuckoo with money. She knows what she should do, she has to save the cuckoo from her stupid brother and his stupid friends. Suddenly she has an idea. She can hide it in the attic and make sure that her "evil" brother or his friends don't get to know of it. She hides it and protects it for 3 weeks from everyone. Oh! do they come close to knowing it! Her brother's friend - the meanest of them all - came almost close to discovering her secret when the cricket ball fell into the attic. Her mother was almost close to knowing her secret when she was adamant on cleaning up the attic, but she saved it by offering to do it herself. For 5 days her legs, her body and her arms ached of all the work she did on the big attic, but she knows it is only for the good of that poor bird. 3 weeks went by thus, and then that day came when her brother found out about it. He vowed to hit her if she doesn't let him have that cuckoo. She stood right in front of the little nest she had made for the cuckoo and tried to save it. Ofcourse, she is no match for him. He pushes her away and greedily pounces on that poor bird. A gentle flap and a sound of what seemed like a chirp, that is all was needed before the bird rushes into the air and flies out of the window. Jano jumped up in joy and her eyes almost filled up. For a moment she felt as if she saw the cuckoo stare at her from the big tree in the front yard before it took to the air - singing all the way until it disappeared into the sky. Jai swore to tell her parents. But nothing mattered to her now - she just saved a bird and she knows it is happily reunited with it's family.