Red Carpet by S. Aleksov - Short - {no summary} - doc, format 8)

guess there isn't much to say. It seemed like just a bunch of subconscious imagry kinda like the "Ring" tape.

What's with on/off? Kinsda reminds me of Ike Wote Une.

Quoted from -Ben- What's with on/off? Kinsda reminds me of Ike Wote Une.

It kinda reminded me of that episode of the  'The Simpsons' where Moe changes the bar to a trendy nightclub.

Homer
What's with all the eyeballs?

Moe
It's Po Mo.

Lenny
What?

Moe
Post Modern?

Homer, Lenny, Carl, and Barney look on dumbfoundedly.

Moe
Alright, weird for the sake of weird.

That's exactly what this was.  Weird for the sake of weird.

Thank-you for your reviews,

I was going for something strange, and somewhat freaky. I hope this is how it turned out to everyone.

Curse!

This was...creepy? It did remind me of the Ring tape like bihwhoop said. The thing that kind of creeped me out was the "On and off" voice. I imagined a little kid saying it, and little kids creep me out. I never really understood what it was...or why it was...or why it is called Red Carpet. But hey! A part creeped me out!

All I can say is that I had every visual of it in my mind as I read. Great job.

Comparing it to The Ring is not good because the tape in The Ring was only a part of the film.  This is just a bunch of images.

If you want to simply put visuals into words, then I recommend you write poetry.  Screenwriting isn't the right medium for you.  Was this supposed to mean something?


Phil

Hey Curse.  I might be the only person in world who appreciated your version of EDT, and generally, I think you write well above your age level -- especially when I look at some of the cr*p churned out by board members that have a couple of years on you (but let's not mention any names).

But this one?  Eh....not so much.  The "on and off" is wonderful.  I love it.  Honestly.  But that is really the only thing this little fantasy piece has going for it.  The comparisons to the "Ring" tape are right on, but dogglebe's point is also well taken.

Standing alone, this piece has no point to it.

You format well, and are developing a good understanding of the craft.  Save these kind of stories for the young hacks out there writing "Ip uked up" or whatever the hell that was called.

Bert, I think the script you're referring to is called 'If ucked up.'


Phil

I have no idea.  I wasn't creeped out, I couldn't find a deeper meaning, but I was very confused.  This is like a montage and I don't think is something that should be posted on a public site.  It's only 2 pages!

For 13, though, you are a good 2 or 3 years ahead of where everyone else is.  Your structure and overall ability to write a script is far more along than where I was at age 13.  Right now I think you need to focus on developing a good story and make it entertaining to read, which is one of the cons of being a 13 year old writer.  Avoid these 2 pagers.  I'd say 7 is the minimum.

Good luck on future shtuff.

This is a very odd short I've got here on my hands. I don't know why, but this disturbs me in ways. On/off... The dancing woman or whatever it was. The wrist cutting. You got me a little with this.

Well, um...wow.  I've said it once and I'll say it again.  Please don't smoke the wacky weed and write.  For ths sake of us all!!!  :p

Quoted Text Please don't smoke the wacky weed and write.

Oh, wow, youre hilarious. Jokes about drugs are just "da bomb" these days, expecially when its a repeta of soemthing said form another thread. Brovo. *cough*

Oh, people please stop arguing!

Hello!

Lots of people didn't really like this, I can understand why. If I was someone else, I probarbly wouldn't like it either.

It was just to be a small, twisted script that would make you think about the first thing that came to your mind.

That's all it was,

Curse!

P.S: There was no drug-taking in the process =)

Curse,

It seemed to me a psychedelic piece with good strong images and I swear heard something like a mix of Ravi Shankar with Led Zeppelin’s Dazed and Contused.

good stuff!

Thankyou for all your reviews, it is highly appreciated.

Of course, this is only two pages - I would usually refraim from submitting scripts under 10 pages into SS, but in this case, and for the CHAIN/LETTER case, it is differant.

I knew right from the beginning lots of people may see this as a strange, and kind of pointless thing to write. Anyway, to the point, I based most of this script on dreams/experiences I have had in the past.

That's it,

Curse!