Nagasaki Daydreams by Marc Neesam (trax) - Short, Drama - On August the 9th 1945 the nuclear bomb, Fat Man, was dropped on Nagasaki. This script tells the story of one man and his life for two days prior to that event. 29 pages - rtf, format 8)

I think you should print it out and read it I started but it was a little to jumbled for me.
Once its on paper you will see what I mean.
Its like the Grotto a lot of parenthesis in your dialouge.
Stretch it out rewrite it, i'll read it when it comes back up.