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Posted by: Zack, March 12th, 2008, 5:04pm
Hey Guys,
I was wondering how I'd write a scene viewed through a rifle scope? Here's what I got...
FADE TO-
EXT. WOODS- MORNING
THROUGH A RIFLE SCOPE
In the feild, Chad's leg is still caught in the bear trap. He struggles to free himself, but has no success.
NORMAL P.O.V.
Louis lowers his rifle and smiles.
LOUIS
Got'cha.
Is this right? Any suggestions are appreciated. Thanks.
~Zack~
Posted by: MacDuff, March 12th, 2008, 5:19pm; Reply: 1
I've experimented with different ways when I was writing a scene using binoculars. In the end, I got conflicting reviews from script anaylsis:
1. Use subheadings (like you have)
2. Just write the scene and let the director choose to use the scope\binocular POV.
As for your example, I think there would be a cleaner way to write that. It feels a little stilted at the moment.
Example 1:
EXT. WOODS - DAY
Louis looks through his
RIFLE SCOPE
at Chad in the field, still struggling to free his leg from the bear trap.
Louis lowers his rifle and smiles.
LOUIS
Gotcha.
Example 2:
EXT. WOODS - DAY
Louis looks through the scope of his rifle.
In a field, he spots Chad struggling to free his badly wounded leg from a bear trap.
Louis lowers his rifle and smiles.
LOUIS
Gotcha.
Hope this helps,
Stew
Posted by: Zack, March 12th, 2008, 5:26pm; Reply: 2
Thanks Stew.
I think I may use the first example you offered. It looks about right.
~Zack~
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