30,000 Fate by Expendable Films - Short - When two strangers meet on a plane, casual conversation leads to one sentence that changes a life forever. 8 pages - pdf, format 8)

Hello Clint,

You have a good story here that could be better.  The ending could be stronger.  James buying a ticket to see his kid is good, but I feel that if you had James arriving at Minneapolis with Danelle.  Walking out to greet Vanessa and Riley would make for a hair rising on the back of the neck experience, that accumulating with the punchline.

What do you think?

There are a few formatting issues that you will need to correct, but as a premise.  The story is good.

All the best.


Javier