SPOILER WARNING:
Friday the 13: Part 2
Written by Anthony Filangeri
Genre: Teen Slasher Horror
Who is the protagonist?
Ensable cast.
What is the protagonist's goal?
Birthday celebration at Camp Crystal Lake
Who or what is stopping the protagonist from acheiving that goal?
Jason Vorhees.
What does the protagonist learn at the end of the story?
Friends were killed by Jason Vorhees.
MAJOR PLOT POINTS
ACT I
WORLD OF THE STORY
The two survivors from the first film are quickly killed by Jason Vorhees. A new group of teens come to Crystal Lake hoping to set up a surprise birthday party for their friend. Police finally reach the cabin of the first film and discover the first films murders. A young blonde girl and daughter of a famous novelist comes home to her father, but has reservations about him.
INCITING INCIDENT: Sara, Aaron, and Kyle go opposite of the police investigation to set up camp.
ACT I CONCLUSION
Sarah, Aaron, and Kyle set up camp, but are quickly disposed of by Jason.
ACT II
ACT II QUESTION: Will the police locate Jason Vorhees before he kills the next group of teens?
New group of teens set up a camp site on the opposite side of Sarah, Aaron, and Kyle's site. Slowly start to veer off in different directions for various reasons (Sex, drinking, swimming, food, etc.) One by one half of the group is killed.
MIDPOINT - Inessa locates the orignial campsite of Kyle, Aaron, and Sarah.
Anthony and another Sara bump into Lacey and head back to her place. While there, a police investigation spills into the home, causing Lacey's novelist father to become uneasy. Anthony and Sara manage to leave the home, while Lacey discovers her father murdered her mother, solving the B plot line.
ACT II CONCLUSION - Police do not locate Jason. Focus more attention on Lacey's father Patrick Summers.
ACT III
ACT III QUESTION - Will the remaining survivors leave Crystal Lake before they are killed?
CLIMAX - Final stand off at Summers home. All are killled.
TWIST - No one survives. Media reports that Patrick Summers is the mass murderer, and not Jason Vorhees.
RESOLUTION - A new summer camp has been set up 1 year later, igniting potential sequel status, and two more victims are slain.
THOUGHTS:
This was a well-written teen slasher with plenty of deaths. However, most of the script played to similar to the original movie. One group of teens killed. Another group coming in after them. Literal transplant of the first remake. Too many characters made the story hard to follow and many of the characters were lost to me. I had to go back to the original intro scenes to make sure I knew who was who. Especially with so many names so similar (Caelyn, Carolyn, Sara, Sarah, etc.)
I was very impressed with the death scenes. Very creative and went along with the reputation that Friday the 13th has for grusome death scenes. The Bug Spray death I feel was your best and most original one.
I also applaud you for making a horror film where drugs was not a main factor in the stupidity of the protagonists actions. I liked that they were party people, but not burn outs. Gave more credibility to your story.
I did not like that there were no survivors. When no one survives a horror film it gives me a sense of pointlessness to the whole narrative. Makes me wonder what was the reason for watching if no one is going to make it out.
The subplot with Lacey and Patrick was clever. Definitely gave Jason a alibi for his annoyminity. Hence setting up a sequel, which = more Box Office.
SUGGESTIONS:
* Rename some of the characters. In an ensamble cast, you need to have succint distinctions between each character or they will become too confusing.
* Rework some of the death scenes. Some of the scenes were too reminiscent of prior films. The bow and arrow and the tent death scene were already done in the remake universe. Try to be more original.
* Create more tension scenes. Most of the tension scenes in the script were just RUSTLING BUSHES. Come up with newer ways to forbode something in the distance. It's the woods. You have water, rocks, animals, etc.
FINAL WORDS
All in all a very well written sequel to a film I feel was one of the worst movies I had ever seen. With your story, the characters had more purpose and less stupidity to them. Clean up some of your character names and give your final character to die a better chance at trying to live. With Sara dying so suddenly it gives a let down to the audience. Let us think she is going to live a bit longer then cut her down. One thing they did right in the first film was giving us that hope that Jenna would survive. But BAM, she did not.