Recompense by Ron Aberdeen - Thriller - Revenge is best severed cold, but when you want to prove a point make it hot –- too hot for the US President to take and he will pay the ten billion dollar –- Recompense. 120 pages - pdf, format 8)

Ron,

I was lukewarm on your “Recompense” script.

It is a very clean and straightforward script. It is definitely well written. I am not questioning that.

However, this script portrays the former SAS members as modern day robbing hoods. Everything came too easily for them.  I know that was the point, always in control of the game but would’ve liked to see them crack a bit.

The multiple use of a sniper rifle kept the victims at a distance. No fuss, no muss.

The ticking clock might have been better shown as days remaining – more of a countdown.

Recompense is not a common word which does not lends itself to a memorable title.

A few nits:  The time is not always formatted the same. Sometimes it is 6.45 or 6:45. Page 88 “there” should be “their”.

Gary

Thank you for your input Gary, I agree they have it a bit too easy.