Half-Crazy by Jeremy Johnson (keepkeepingmesane) - Short, Comedy, Play - Half Crazy is revolutionizing the genre of vengeance comedy.  Jasper must battle his low-self esteem, constant hallucinations, and gunman after gunman in order to find and destroy the killer of his one true love, Daisy.  His Sinatra-esque best friend Feivel- hallucinated- keeps him company along the way, as well as his deceased Daisy and other colorful characters from his memory.  This noir-inspired vulgar vendetta is a laugh-out-loud carousel of chaos from beginning to end, not without a potent message about love and the power of forgiveness.  48 pages - rtf, format  :-/

You need to sort out your formatting, dude. No one is going to take this on the way its written, sorry. Read some scripts, see how they are laid out, download Celtx and re-write it. Best of luck.

Yikes.

Even as a stage play, this needs work on it's format as it is almost impossible to read and difficult to judge from a story point of view.

I am completely mystified at the use of such terms as VO and Slow Motion in what you state is a stage play!