Counterfactual by Micah Gerger - Drama - Driven to opposing sides of political extremism, two college students must face the violent reality their internal battles have created.   127 pages - pdf, format 8)

Micah, just happened to notice your script in unproduced script of the day and decided to take a look. I was surprised to see no one has commented on your thread.

   I started reading it but couldn't make it past the first few pages. The script seems to be well written, but you have overlooked something extremely important. This is something that can be easily fixed. You don't introduce your characters in caps or actually you don't introduce them at all.

   This makes the script almost impossible to follow. You can't really tell who is who, at least I had trouble.

   Other than that the script seemed to be pretty well written, the pages I read at least. I would go back and fix this problem and then repost, that's just my opinion.

   Good luck with it.  Marvin.  

  

Not going to lie, i had to push myself to read 50+ pages and i couldnt read more than that.  It's very difficult to understand the premise and going back and forth between jonah and ben was very confusing since there was no introduction of the characters.  

I would like to try and finish the script but the story is just very hard to follow and theres no linkage or anything to tell me that the plot is going somewhere.

I still dont understand what the plot is truly about and all i got was the professor saying "counterfactual"

Thanks for the feedback - I appreciate it - a script supervisor friend of mine was on me about that the other day too.  Counterfactual is actually going into production next month and I suspect the film will be significantly easier to follow than this admittedly sloppy version of the script... I'll definitely apply that advice to my recent projects though!