Roy Smears by Brendan Nevison (smug) - Short, Spoof, Comedy - A spoof on the Bush craft expert Ray Mears. 3 pages - pdf, format 8)

I had five minutes on my hands so gave this a quick read.

Brendan are you around?

This script is a skit, nothing wrong with that, it's just this didn't quite worked for me.

I'd download Celtx as it'll help with your formatting.

You're first slug is all the way on the right-hand side of the screen.  Should be on the left.

Not sure what you were trying to achieve with the first Roy Smears and That's Nature wording.  Just needs to be deleted.  Just capitalise ROY wears...

The End Scene at the end leads me to believe there's more.  Just write The End instead.

All the best,


Javier