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Posted by: Don, March 14th, 2010, 11:24am
The Artistes Worry by Richard Buckley (cathead) - Short, Comedy, Skit - Every artist carries pain within their bones… 2 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: albinopenguin, March 14th, 2010, 11:52pm; Reply: 1
for being a 2 page little short, i really enjoyed this. it was well written and the last line was totally unexpected.

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now obviously, the whole "damaging the wrong hand, foot, etc" has been done before. but the context that it was placed in was completely new and original.

oh and the lenght- perfect. a lot of other writers would draw this out, but its a simple joke with a solid premise. hence why it shouldnt be any longer.

so kudos. i definitely look forward to reading more of your work.
Posted by: Cathead, March 15th, 2010, 1:48pm; Reply: 2
Cheers,

Glad you liked it. This is from a kind of a theory of mine, whenever I watch/read a sketch I feel it takes away from the sketch that you know the punchlines coming, so I tried to make the reader almost forget about what they are reading is a skit.
Posted by: usaking, March 17th, 2010, 8:31am; Reply: 3
This was an okay script. I wasn't really expecting a lot from a 2 page script and that's basically what I got - not a lot.

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Maybe it is because I am not a painter, but I didn't think the story was that interesting. I mean. the ending with the hammer hitting his right hand, instead of his left, made me chuckle. Yet, that's the only laugh I gave it. The formatting is fine, so good job with that. I just didn't really care that much for the story.
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