Pirates vs Ninjas vs Zombies vs Robots by Chris Pender (theolsen3) - Short - A heroic teacher saves the day for a group of students  when zombies infest the neighborhood. But, the group has a secret that is the key to a sinister plot from space. 26 pages - pdf, format 8)

Wow...this one is going to get bashed in pretty much the same fashion as your other two scripts, Chris.

If you really want some genuine critiques of your work -- at the very least, some tips on proper format -- you are gonna have to speak up and say hello or something.

Well as soon as I seen this title I decided to give it a go, but sadly the poor formating threw me off pretty quickly.

I suggest searching on the net or reading a screenwriting book to see how a screenplay is properly formated.

Yeah, I really wanted to enjoy this script, Chris, but the horrible formatting just through me off. What surprises me is that bert said you wrote 2 other scripts, yet, you make the same mistake with this one as with the others? Did people give you advice before? If so, did you listen to the advice?

It seems to me like you have a great storytelling brain, but the problem is with your formatting. Read some scripts on SS and please try to change the way you write your scripts.

Chris, myself and several others gave you advice on proper formatting on your previous two scripts. and judging by this, you clearly pissed away our suggestions. read some scripts on SS and then write.

and thanks for listening to people who were trying to help you out