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Posted by: Don, March 27th, 2010, 4:27pm
Echoes - episode 1 - In the belly of Nam by Allan Bourne - Short, War - The lives of two young men change forever, one is a American soldier fighting the Vietnam War. And the other is a small Vietnamese boy who only wishes to protect his little brother. 10 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: Forgive, March 31st, 2010, 7:55am; Reply: 1
I can only guess that this is unfinished - seemed to fade off & out with no real conclusion.

For the most part I liked the script, it felt like it was building up to a good relationship between the two parties involved, and was setting the scene for an involving situation.

Some issues with spelling and grammar, which would need polishing.

Wasn't too sure about the helicopter landing - don't they usually have guys who go out and establish good landing ground, too make sure they are not jumping 15 feet in tall grass (too many broken legs & ankles) & would the grass be 10 feet tall if there are helicopter blades spinning??

Aside from that, looked like it could develop into a really good script.
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